Revisions

The first draft of my story has been looked over, and I'm very pleased with the feedback. While most of it was positive, I felt that the constructive criticisms were very helpful in creating a complete final product. I clearly need to be more precise about my attribution, and it is obvious that a lot of my story may be construed as analysis, which, as any educated reader knows, is not news. By taking care to ensure that the remainder of my work on this story is strong in regard to supporting my statements, I'll be creating a story that may actually make an impact.